tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8417850843973944836.post1908190585850006768..comments2024-02-27T00:19:14.984-08:00Comments on Burning Zeppelin Experience: A Writer Pre-FearsMarkhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16741134687274260833noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8417850843973944836.post-79609525559640856192009-02-24T03:07:00.000-08:002009-02-24T03:07:00.000-08:00Yeah, I'm with Kathryn_aka_Kat. The first made me ...Yeah, I'm with Kathryn_aka_Kat. The first made me feel like I had gotten to know someone. I cared about you and wanted to help. The second felt closed off and superficial. With the perspective of both I, of course, wanted you to feel many of the emotions in the second one and think it is useful to reframe in the positive. But from a compelling artistic perspective, definitely want to continue reading about the first one and not the second.Unknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14048387388681379496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8417850843973944836.post-33270974310890262062009-02-20T12:43:00.000-08:002009-02-20T12:43:00.000-08:00Wow. That's not what I expected at all! Thanks for...Wow. That's not what I expected <I>at all</I>! Thanks for the input, though.<BR/><BR/>Now that you mention it, I think I know why it turned out that way: the first is where I "really" am and the second is where I want to be. So I suppose it makes sense that the first is a little more heartfelt and the second a little more stilted.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8417850843973944836.post-19031646371636936402009-02-20T12:26:00.000-08:002009-02-20T12:26:00.000-08:00Um, no. I liked reading the first one better. No...Um, no. I liked reading the first one better. Now, this doesn't mean your premise is necessarily wrong, because they're also written in completely different styles as well as attitudes. The first is chatty, fast-paced, casual, and helps me identify with the writer, poor guy, I really feel for him. The second is stiff, detached, pompous. See use of over-long words and cliched phrases: culmination, looking forward to, greatest regret, nonetheless. It reads like a classroom essay or a cover letter. Yeah, poor guy *yawn*. :-)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com